會考英語作文範文及評析：看圖作文1

【習作要求】

看圖寫話
　　根據所給圖示，以"Wang Lei's Busy Day"爲題，寫一篇不少於50字的短文，內容必須符合圖意，語意連貫，句式規範，字跡工整。（正文第一句已給出）

Wang Lei's Busy Day
　　 It was March 8th yesterday.
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　　【參考範文】

It was March 8th yesterday. It was Women's Day. Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother. He went shopping and bought much food. Then he cleaned the room. He did his best to do some cooking. When his mother came back after work, she was very happy. Wang Lei was very tired, but he felt pleased. （58個詞）

　　【名師點評】

先"看準題意"：題目是Wang Lei's Busy Day。寫作要圍繞王雷一天中所忙碌的事情的順序展開。描述昨天的事應該用過去時。從題意理解中即可"規範格式"：本文用記敘文格式去寫。再"按點組句"：
　　（1）3月8日爲婦女節。→It was Women's Day.
　　（2）王雷去商店購物。→Wang Lei went shopping and bought much food.
　　（3）王雷打掃衛生。→He cleaned the room.
　　（4）他燒飯。母親回家很高興。→He did the cooking. When his mother came back, she was very happy.

完成組句後，"連句成段"，可加上句子間的銜接句子。如在（1）與（2）之間可加上Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother.

在最後可再談王雷一天的感受：He was very tired, but he felt happy.把這些句子連成段後，最後"通篇潤色"。