THE PARTY2000字作文

There was once a family, and they were all happy. Although they did not have much Money, the children still thought that working is the best!

In their country, lived a wise king, and you may guess, that this king was proud and unkind; most people don’t like him, and so had driven him away through the woods, and into a small boat, which they sent him away.

The king was not happy about this, and so went to see General Lord, to let him help to win back his crown. And suppose, you may guess, that this proud king had an evil Roman prince. It was already dawn and the sun was setting, General Lord gave five horses to them; and told them to follow him. They galloped further and further, until they came to a dark cave; curled with thick thorny bushes, but this was no ordinary cave; oh no, this was a palace cave, which lived the king of all animals.

And the king of all animals was nobody but the great tiger! Yikes! Most people thought tigers weren’t very nice, but General Lord saw him years ago; and they had been friends ever since. And so there was a pretty good chance General Lord said, “Go in,” The proud king, and the selfish Queen; with their son, the wicked Roman prince, entered the mouth of the cave. General Lord led them inside, and there sat the big tiger. This tiger said, “Hello dear friends,” “Ah!” cried the king, “A talking tiger!” “Of course,” said General Lord, “Kings were supposed to learn everything.”

“Now,” said the tiger, “What can I do for you General Lord?” “I want a party!” “A party?” asked the proud king, “I just want you to help me win back my crown!” he shouted, “Yes,” said General Lord, “But a party could show your people that you love them and care for them.”

The king accepted the offer of General Lord, and so took the party decorations, and decorated the main hall, and then made the treats, and invited all the people here, “What do you want proud king?” “I want to give you a party, to say that I am sorry for all the bad deeds I have done.”

“It’s about time proud king. Ha!” and then the music began; they danced all night, and sang. Everybody thought that the king just wanted them to give him back; but they already realized that they had already made Milan the king. And so they went to the palace, and told him that they wanted the old king back; and that he should get off the throne.

Milan was very angry by these words, and so sent guards to arrest him. Just then the old king approached, he knew that Milan loved to dance, and that he couldn’t bear not to. He took the music box here, and began to dance. As he said, Milan began to dance, and he pushed him aside; which allowed him to sit, and that was how the old king became king again.”

修改後

There was once a family, and they were all happy. Although they did not have much money, the children still thought that working is the best!

In their country, lived a wise king, and you may guess, that this king was proud and unkind; most people don’t like him, and they had driven him away through the woods, and into a small boat, which they sent him away.

The king was not happy about this, and so he went to see General Lord, to let him help to win back his crown. And suppose, you may guess, that this proud king had an evil Roman prince. It was already dawn and the sun was setting, General Lord gave five horses to them; and told them to follow him. They galloped further and further, until they came to a dark cave; curled with thick thorny bushes, but this was not an ordinary cave; oh no, this was a palace cave, which lived the king of all animals.

And the king of all animals was nobody but the great tiger! Yikes! Most people thought tigers weren’t very nice, but General Lord saw him years ago; and they had been friends ever since. And so there was a pretty good chance General Lord said, “Go in,” The proud king, and the selfish Queen; with their son, the wicked Roman prince, entered the mouth of the cave. General Lord led them inside, and there sat the big tiger. This tiger said, “Hello dear friends,” “Ah!” cried the king, “A talking tiger!” “Of course,” said General Lord, “Kings were supposed to learn everything.”

“Now,” said the tiger, “What can I do for you General Lord?” “I want a party!” “A party?” asked the proud king, “I just want you to help me win back my crown!” he shouted, “Yes,” said General Lord, “But a party could show your people that you love them and care for them.”

The king accepted the offer of General Lord, and he took the party decorations, and decorated the main hall, and then made the treats, and invited all the people here, “What do you want proud king?” “I want to give you a party, to say that I am sorry for all the bad deeds I have done.”

“It’s about time proud king. Ha!” and then the music began; they danced all night, and sang. Everybody thought that the king just wanted them to let him back; but they already realized that they had already made Milan the king. And so they went to the palace, and told him that they wanted the old king back; and that he should get off the throne.

Milan was very angry by these words, so he sent guards to arrest him. Just then the old king approached, he knew that Milan loved to dance, and that he couldn’t bear not to. He took the music box here, and began to dance. As he said, Milan began to dance, and he pushed him aside; which allowed him to sit, and that was how the old king became king again.”

四年級:歐陽雨鷺